やっと一服したので反省会

購入していただいた方ありがとうございます、
前回に比べると入れたかったものをいくつか削ってしまったので不安でしたが
思ったより買ってもらえてよかったです。

--こっから反省会--
今回イスキアには及ばなかったけど初動はよかった、
そして過去作の比較して気が付いたんですが初動の良し/悪しはDLSiteだけの話で
Fanzaの販売一週間見比べてみたら実は大差ないということに気付く、
やっぱりサムネ絵なんですかね初動の違いは(FANZAはアイコン)
今回表紙は本編の使い回しですが気に入ってます、ケイロスねーさんの見栄えの良いコマがあってよかった。

-作画
肌の露出は少なかったけどその分スーツ等のツヤ入れてたらあまり時間の差はなかったです。
ただショタの顔についてはちょっとまた好みから外れてきてるのでスラ娘～乳魔ごろのに戻そうかなと、あのくらいの中性的な方が似合う。
背景最初ネオン表現多すぎてスマホで確認したら見づらくなってたのでエピローグを除いて
削る、あんま照りすぎるとエロシーンとしては不向きですね…元々環境光は多用しますが。

-内容
これインテレッセにも言えるんですが30P程度という制限で
　1：TSF化
　2：洗脳化と快楽堕ち
　3：前戯としての調教
　4：本番1(男性時)
　5：本番2(女性時)
を詰め込むの難しくないか？と懸念
実はプロローグで戦闘敗北シーンもネームには入ってたんですが
これだけで3P分になって「あ、無理」と削ってしまった。
4・5に関してはそもそも4を入れずにいきなり女体化後のみで行為をしてるのはわりとあるんですけどね。
なお前作に関してはページ数はあったから、変にストーリー化せずに最初のシーン内で完結させちゃえばエロ漫画としては質がよくなったのかもしれない。

個人的には調教シーンもっとしっかり描きたいんですよね、
M向け作品としてはここが薄くなるのがどうしても気になってしまって…
何よりここの部分の表現のノウハウが全然付く気がしない、
やっぱり属性特盛というのは意外と動けなくなるんですかね…。

次回作は変な思い付きがない限りは属性削って調教シーンに力入れてみます。

eng: ... Sorry that the quality of English sentences is lower than usual because of the long sentences.

Thank you for your purchase.
I was worried because I had to cut out some of the things I wanted to include compared to last time.
I'm glad you bought more than I expected.

--Reflection session--
I know we didn't quite match Ischia this time, but the initial response was good.
And I've noticed that the good/bad initial response is only for DLSite.

I noticed that the good/bad initial response was only for DLSite, and when I compared the sales of Fanza in the first week, I realized that there was actually not much difference.
I wonder if the difference in initial sales is due to the thumbnail picture (FANZA is the icon).
I like the cover of this issue, even though it's a reproduction of the main issue, and I'm glad that Keiros has a good looking panel.

-Art-
There wasn't much skin exposure, but if I had put in the luster of the suit, etc. for that, there wouldn't have been much difference in time.
I think I'm going to go back to the SlimeGirl~Mamelon style, because the boy's face is not to my liking again.
I found it hard to see the background when I checked it on my phone because there were too many neon expressions at first, so I decided to remove them, except for the epilogue.
I'll cut it down, too much illumination is not suitable for an erotic scene...although I originally used a lot of ambient light.

-Story-
This is true for Intelesse, but with the limitation of about 30p.
　1: TSF
　2: Brainwashing and pleasure depravity
　3: Training as foreplay
　4: sex1 (for men)
　5: sex2 (for women)
Isn't it difficult to pack I am concerned about it.
Actually, I had a battle defeat scene in the prologue in my name.
But this alone was enough for 3 pages, and I had to cut it down to "Oh, it's impossible".
As for 4 and 5, I didn't include 4 in the first place, and suddenly I'm doing the act only after the female body is transformed, which is rather common.
As for the previous work, there were enough pages, so it might have been better quality as an erotic manga if it had been completed within the first scene without making it a strange story.

Personally, I would like to see more training scenes.
I am not sure if it would have been better if the story had been completed within the first scene.
Above all, I don't think I'll ever have the know-how to express this part of the story.
I guess the special attributes of the work are unexpectedly stuck....

I'm going to cut down on the attributes and focus on the training scenes in my next work, unless I have some strange ideas.